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SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 40: In the Dark
Victor is so cool xD
And thus starts the problem with Letal..I really hope she evolves, she's so much smarter then what Mark thinks she is. Besides, Letaligon even looks way awesome O_O
[06/14/2009 05:17:47]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 33: Thunderyu
This is such an epic battle, the RBY Champion music should be playing in the background!
[06/14/2009 03:13:31]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 15: Darkness and Poison
"A huge, orange, spider-like Pokémon with black markings and six legs striped"
Ariados has four legs.Reply: I know that now, odd as it is.
[06/13/2009 21:22:39]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Mammal, the Monster and the Mental Change
I hate to have to point out a lot of mistakes in this chapter, but:
“Dragon rage!” Mark roared.
Both words of Dragon Rage should be capatilized, shouldn't they? They are in the games. Same goes for Sky Attack. Raikou used Calm Mind to power up Crunch, right? It would be Bulk Up, because Crunch is a physical attack.Reply: Dragon Rage: I know; I wrote that in 2004 when I had no idea how English capitalizations worked (in Icelandic you only ever capitalize the first word of titles and so on).
Calm Mind and Crunch: I wrote that in 2004 when Ruby and Sapphire had just come out, Crunch was still special and there was no reason to think it ever would be otherwise.
[06/13/2009 19:32:38]
shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Book
A few questions to ask:
1. What color is Mysticrown? It says that she has purple gems, white wings, magenta mane and tail, but what color is her body?
2. Does Darkhan have a horn? And if he does, what does it look like?
3. It says near the end that Chaletwo is the most powerful Pokemon in the world, tied with someone else. It doesn't state who he's tied with, because Mark leaves the library then. However, this Pokemon tied with Chaletwo would be Molzapart, correct?
Yes, these are completely pointless, but after reading them over again they're beginning to bug the heck out of me :PReply: 1. Mysticrown is white.
2. Darkhan has a generic unicorn horn.
3. Yes, that would be Molzapart. In earlier versions of this chapter, it explicitly described Molzapart, but I cut it out in the ILCOE because I thought Molzapart was too silly to introduce so early in the story as if he's going to be important.
[06/09/2009 00:29:50]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 3: Vuiiii!
“Bye dad! Bye mom! I promise I won’t get myself killed!”
Shouldn't dad aand mom be capatilized, because they are being used as names, therefor they are proper nouns.Reply: Yeah, they should be.
[06/07/2009 22:08:40]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 13: The Black Desert
Þetta var skemmtilegur kafli, spennandi, góð hugmynd með "skuggann" sem færðist yfir eyðimörkina. Og gaman að lesa um muninn á mönnum og pokemonum.
[05/26/2009 22:53:01]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 12: Let There Be Light
Scyther fer sínar eigin leiðir, eins og kötturinn.
[05/26/2009 14:13:45]
BejnJonathonXander23
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
Awesome
Shame Mark had to lose though.
[05/10/2009 13:18:18]
Giratar
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 33: Thunderyu
This sounds a lot like the games, where you can catch legendaries, too. This chapter was brilliant. =D
[05/06/2009 23:38:36]
Giratar
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart
When Mark saw something with red eyes, was it a Mutark?Reply: Actually, it was Spirit the Ninetales, whom I assume you've read about now since you've commented on chapter 33.
[05/06/2009 22:07:19]
Giratar
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 26: Dead or Alive
Flora is a bit of a pottymouth. Amusing.
By the way, Mark reminds me a bit of Ash.
[05/06/2009 21:35:06]
Emerald Espeon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
Great chapter :D But, a few times earlier in the fic, didn't Jolteon use Thunder Wave on a Pokémon with Volt Absorb to some effect?Reply: …huh. Now that you mention it, he did. I have no idea why I did that.
[04/30/2009 22:07:35]
Serebii99
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
NO!!! Mark lost!? *cries* They must have cheated…Reply: …uh? Mark losing is really nothing new. o_O He is not out of the League yet, if that's what you're thinking, since this is the preliminaries, but yes, he lost, and I am puzzled by the suggestion that an opponent would need to "cheat" to beat him when he's been losing all the time since the beginning of the story. Just because he's the main character doesn't mean he can't lose at the League just as anywhere else.
[04/11/2009 15:42:36]
Pikachu Goddess
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
Dude. That was great! :D I'm so glad that you got a chapter up; I was missing reading The Quest for the Legends.
[04/08/2009 02:21:03]
Stephen
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 27: Past, Present and Future
You said Dragonair practiced his flying skills.
That would mean Mark had 7 Pokemon.Reply: Technically, he was practicing his flying skills at the beginning of the chapter, when Gyarados was not out, so theoretically Mark could have just recalled him by the time they made the campfire, but I don't think I was actually thinking it that far at the time I wrote that.
[04/06/2009 16:49:56]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
WOW, that has to be my new favorite battle. Superbly thought out, and I completley forget about Glalie at the end x.x I think I found a small mistake though. "Weakened and paralyzed and barely conscious Glalie had won Aaron White the battle."
Shouldn't there be a comma after conscious?
[04/04/2009 17:29:01]
kidpixkid
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Book
I like Vaxil… *cry* I am making an AU writing of this with Vaxil never dying!
[04/04/2009 10:19:40]
kidpixkid
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 35: Suicune
I hate Gyarados!! Make a new Suicune!! Revise the plot of the legendary stuff thing to have a suicune that didn't die!!! I'm going to make an AU writing of this where Suicune doesn't die. POKéMON CAN'T DIE! I CAN CATCH DEAD POKéMON IF THEY COULD DIE! I got over it now. What is the subplot anyway? Explain it please. I could still catch dead Suicune with the Dead Ball, my special creation. When they dragged its body, did they drag its head too?Reply: Stop being silly. You'll never function in the real world if you can't get over the deaths of fictional characters.
[04/04/2009 10:18:34]
shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 28: Scyther's Revenge
Even though you spelled 'license' correctly in chapter 22, you keep spelling it as 'licence' in this chapter.
[04/04/2009 04:24:45]