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puredragon222
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
This was a truly epic battle. I can't believe that Letal(igon) evolved! And there I was, expecting that she would never evolve and you would write a spin-off on how she killed her father <.< >.>
[07/10/2009 13:08:42]
Midnight
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Pokémon on the Road
Okay! \o/ As I've said before, I put TQftL on my DS, and have been editing this personal copy with small, mostly formatting, edits. For non-formatting, larger changes, I marked with an asterisk to comment on the site later - like now! You can see each of what I changed at http://pastebin.com/m2b1a27b1 , and I'll just mark the most commenty comments here, and you can respond to both! :D
Well, this being the shortest chapter, there's not too much to say. There's some parts that could be rewritten for conciseness: "so that it seemed almost like" and "which was that they were" specifically. I also note the recurring combination of 'feeling' adjectives - "sadly", "fearfully", "disbelieving" - and nouns that wouldn't usually get them. Personification is all well and good, and I could see it with the first example of the town, I suppose, but… yeah.
One question: if a few of the Legendaries were still alive, whole, and breathing, why didn't Mew save them? Why create a new one… let me look up 25 again… yeah, if he wanted to "save everything that could be saved", it seems like he could have started with those easier ones - perhaps create Chaletwo along with that, but not solely.
Okay! \o/ Also, I don't think the printable version links are working for some reason.
[07/03/2009 20:09:53]
shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Pokémon Festival – May 22nd: The Attack Approval
"…but it had taken him a while after having used the attack three times in a row."
Sorry if I'm being an idiot (again), but didn't Gyarados use Dragon Beam four times in a row, or was he knocked out before he used it the fourth time?Reply: Yes, he was knocked out before he used it the fourth time. Politoed hit him with an Ice Beam that made him lose his concentration, and then with another one before he'd managed to charge it up again.
[07/02/2009 03:49:56]
Icy
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
Awesome chapter!
Too bad Mark lost, but having main characters that always win is one of my pet peeves. :P
By the way, was Aaron the kid at the festival who asked for the Ditto? Mark thought he looked familiar, and he said that Ditto had been his starter Pokemon.Reply: Yes, Aaron was the guy at the Festival who got the Ditto. It's a bit of an easter egg for observant readers.
[07/02/2009 02:05:24]
Asbjørn Jacobsen
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
I love your fanfic Dragonfree, it is without a doubt the best I have ever read. Your battle scenes are amazing. I just have one question, how often do you post new chapters? I stayed up every night for the last four nights, just to find out what happens next. I can't wait for the next Chapter.Reply: How long it takes me to write a chapter varies immensely; I have written a chapter in two days, and I have taken six months to get one done. Normally I believe it's something between one and two months, though.
[06/28/2009 17:05:09]
Mewsa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
I love your battle seaquences! The ones I write myself are a bit boring at the moment…
I think in an earlier chapter Letaligon said that once she had evolved she wanted to be relesed so she could challenge her father. Can't wait to find out if she does or not!!!Reply: She did, but in chapter 41 she had an agreement with Mark that if she went with them to the League, she would stick with him until it was over and then they would return to Ruxido to release her.
[06/27/2009 20:40:28]
Kitsune
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Wow- your battle scenes are amazing! I very much liked this chapter, especially Letal's evolution! I have a dumb question, however- is Earth Power a real move, or one made up for the fic?Reply: Earth Power is a real move introduced in Diamond and Pearl. It is basically a Ground-type version of Psychic, and Lunatone does learn it (it's a Platinum move tutor move).
[06/25/2009 00:12:41]
christmasmike
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Please forgive me if you think this is a dumb question but,
what is the difference between a pokemon coming in or out of the ball with white light or red light? I noticed you use both and I don't know if there's a difference or not.Reply: Pokémon glow white when they come out of the ball but red when absorbed back into the ball. As it happens I did not notice this until quite late, so all the earlier chapters show the Pokémon both coming out and going back in via red light, but in the later chapters I think I've been getting it right. If you spotted a Pokémon appearing in red light in this chapter somewhere, by all means tell me so I can fix it.
[06/23/2009 18:10:32]
ShadowDusk
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
wow
Reply: If you are so completely speechless as to not be able to make a comment longer than one word, there is little reason to comment at all. If you continue making one-worded posts, I will have to ban you.
[06/23/2009 01:54:17]
shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones
What were those lights doing, anyway? Were they of any signifigance? Or were they just random?Reply: Just an attempt at realistic light switches that might be in a Pokémon Gym, pretty much. :/
[06/23/2009 00:33:03]
Sapph
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Gooooooooo Letal, or should I say Letaligon, you rule!
[06/20/2009 12:45:14]
elyvorg
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 44: Polaryu
“Chaletwo, you know where you put him,” Mark said in exasperation. “Where do we go?”
I was randomly skimming this chapter for no apparent reason and this caught my eye. Wouldn't this indicate to May that Chaletwo was the one who created Polaryu, which is something Mark seems to have an unspoken agreement with Chaletwo not to let her know?
While I'm at it, I'll just mention that I went and read the bit where they talk about the dragons in Chapter 31 just to make sure my point wasn't somehow dealt with there, and Chaletwo's reaction to May's suggestion that he just Death Stared Thunderyu was freaking adorable. I never quite realised why he acted like that before, but now I know how much he loves those widdle murderous dragons… x3Reply: …let's just say it slipped out but May wasn't paying enough attention to get suspicious. :D; Or maybe she assumed Chaletwo was just the one to seal him away, hence knowing of the locations of the other dragons, but not the one to create them. Or something.
(And yes, Chaletwo can be quite adorable. :3)
[06/19/2009 12:43:12]
Oh-Paching
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Awesome job on this chapter! When the nurse told him that he couldn't use Charizard, I felt a rush of anger for him. Wow, that just proves how much I've bonded with the characters you have created!
Also, no offense, but it was really easy to predict the Letal vs. Letaligon battle.
[06/19/2009 01:01:18]
Destiny.EXE
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
nice work. I liked this chapter alot. Nice suprise with the evolution. Keep on writing!
[06/18/2009 01:16:55]
Raitora Kuro Yamiraku
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
E-P-I-C. That was so awesome, Butterfree. I can't wait to see what Letal–er, Letaligon– can do.
[06/17/2009 20:27:23]
Pikachu Goddess
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Magnificent battle! Frankly, having Letal evolve caught me off guard. I wonder how she's feeling about that… XD
[06/16/2009 19:24:24]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
Wow…Letal evolving gave me goosebumps..this battle makes me wish that the line were real pokemon. Amazing battle, I bet even May will be impressed.
[06/16/2009 15:45:16]
shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
"They were all cheering for him – him and Letal."
Does it say Letal just because Mark still thinks of her as Letal, or is that a typo?
Otherwise:
This makes me want to flip through the channels, trying to find the battles on TV. I guess I'll just have to stick to watching History D:Reply: The idea is that they were cheering for Letal's evolution into Letaligon, and thus for Letal. (That and saying "him and Letaligon" would be ambiguous - you have no idea how much trouble it was to try to word everything so that it would be clear which Letaligon is being referred to without it being awkward.)
[06/16/2009 00:12:31]
ivymeleon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
This is a very good story.
It actually was a good idea to have Mark lose – it makes it more realistic.
[06/15/2009 18:19:08]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Ouen League – Chapter 46: Day One
-commenting on the extra-
Weird, didn't May say waaaaay earlier in the fic that she thought Quilava was okay, but she hated Cyndaquil?
Reply: She did, and she does kind of like Quilava. The point of the extra is that she is denying the fact she has conflicted feelings about releasing her, and insisting to herself that she hates Quilava anyway (even though she doesn't) is a sort of final seal of justification on it.
[06/14/2009 06:01:32]