Author's Commentary

In 2018-2019, immediately after finishing the fic, I set about writing a commentary on every chapter, adding comments in bold within the text of the chapter. This was prior to the 2021-2022 patch version, so the commentary is on the older, clumsier versions of those chapters. If you have already read the full story, the commentary may be interesting! Please note that reading the commentary on your first time through is not recommended; it freely discusses lategame spoilers from the start.

Version ILCOE with author's commentary

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  1. Prologue
  2. Chapter 1: The Pokémon on the Road
  3. Chapter 2: The Book
  4. Chapter 3: Vuiiii!
  5. Chapter 4: Cleanwater City
  6. Chapter 5: The Lake of Purity
  7. Chapter 6: The Mammal, the Monster and the Mental Change
  8. Chapter 7: Charmeleon’s Trainer
  9. Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones
  10. Chapter 9: Mew's Escape
  11. Chapter 10: The Mew Hunter
  12. Chapter 11: The Lizard and the Mantis
  13. Chapter 12: Let There Be Light
  14. Chapter 13: The Black Desert
  15. Chapter 14: Thief and Victim
  16. Chapter 15: Darkness and Poison
  17. Chapter 16: The Third Badge
  18. Chapter 17: The Shark and the Serpent
  19. Chapter 18: Enemies Forever
  20. Chapter 19: Good or Evil?
  21. Chapter 20: The Warning
  22. The Pokémon Festival – May 21st: Evolution
  23. The Pokémon Festival – May 22nd: The Attack Approval
  24. The Pokémon Festival – May 23rd: The Pokémon Frenzy Tournament
  25. The Pokémon Festival – May 24th: The Threat
  26. The Pokémon Festival – May 25th: Chaletwo's Arrival
  27. Chapter 26: Dead or Alive
  28. Chapter 27: Past, Present and Future
  29. Chapter 28: Scyther's Revenge
  30. Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart
  31. Chapter 30: The Dragons of Ouen
  32. Chapter 31: Spirit
  33. Chapter 32: The Birthday Party
  34. Chapter 33: Thunderyu
  35. Chapter 34: Return to Cleanwater
  36. Chapter 35: Suicune
  37. Chapter 36: The Crater
  38. Chapter 37: Carl
  39. Chapter 38: Volcaryu
  40. Chapter 39: The Workings of the War
  41. Chapter 40: In the Dark
  42. Chapter 41: Return to Scorpio City
  43. Chapter 42: Splitting Up
  44. Chapter 43: To Champion Island
  45. Chapter 44: Polaryu
  46. Chapter 45: The Ouen League HQ
  47. The Ouen League – Chapter 46: Day One
  48. The Ouen League – Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
  49. The Ouen League – Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
  50. The Ouen League – Chapter 49: The Rage of a Scyther
  51. The Ouen League – Chapter 50: Friendly Competition
  52. Chapter 51: Fake-Out
  53. Chapter 52: The League Finals
  54. Chapter 53: Away
  55. Chapter 54: Reunion
  56. Chapter 55: Unprepared
  57. Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari
  58. Chapter 57: Three Conversations
  59. Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
  60. Chapter 59: December
  61. Chapter 60: The Swarm
  62. Chapter 61: Mewtwo
  63. Chapter 62: Diplomacy
  64. Chapter 63: Recovery
  65. Chapter 64: Hide and Seek
  66. Chapter 65: Three Dragons
  67. Chapter 66: Doubts
  68. Chapter 67: Friends
  69. Chapter 68: Truths
  70. Chapter 69: Lies
  71. Chapter 70: Waraider
  72. The Final Stretch – Chapter 71: Shattered
  73. The Final Stretch – Chapter 72: Rick
  74. The Final Stretch – Chapter 73: Recuperation
  75. The Final Stretch – Chapter 74: Unraveling
  76. The Final Stretch – Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
  77. Chapter 76: Chalenor
  78. Chapter 77: Home