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Oh-Paching
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
"I shouldn’t comporomise that just because I feel weird about it, no matter how justified." Spelling error.Reply: Fixed. Well, technically I fixed it yesterday, but I forgot to respond.
[11/28/2011 13:24:43]
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
Can't wait for the next chapter. I loved the spin-offs, can't wait to see how Scyther's gonna react to the Shadowdart fiasco. (Wait, did I spoil the story for people? Nuts)
[11/28/2011 06:01:47]
Venomoth
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
"The suicide was breeding to begin with."
So they kill themselves to make young?
…or that could be a mistake, and the sentence should be: "The breeding was suicide to begin with."Reply: You're semantically misinterpreting it; the wording is as intended. Chaletwo is saying she committed suicide by breeding to begin with, not as a result of what her children did. It is written that way around to make the suicide the subject of the sentence: he's not discussing the fact that breeding was suicidal (he's already established that), but the fact that the actual suicidal act happened before the modern Color Dragons were even born. Basically, the sentence breaks down as "[The suicide was] [breeding to begin with]", not as "[The suicide was breeding] [to begin with]".
Or, if that's incomprehensible, basically it amounts to this:
"She committed suicide by throwing herself off a cliff because her children were fighting."
"Actually, the suicide was when she screwed their father."
Is it that hard to take that meaning away from it? I can't really read that sentence your way; the "to begin with" doesn't quite seem to fit.
[11/28/2011 00:35:22]
sarahc
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
Oh my. (That's about all I can say, since I haven't read the story in FOREVER).
Very dramatic, as usual. I like the twist of neither of them guessing the Color Dragons' types correctly. Is there any way to tell by looking at them, or do you have to see what moves they use?
Also, I'm half-heartedly coming up with my own region. Could you share some insights as to how you got the idea for Ouen and what direction you took it in? Thank you.
Again, very nice work. =DReply: The Color Dragons both look and use moves as if they were Fire/Water/Ice/Poison-types, hence why Mark and May simply assumed that was what they were. Game-wise, they'd even have abilities that give them a STAB-equivalent boost for those types of moves. But in reality, defensively, they all work simply as Dragon/Flying-types, double weakness to Ice and all.
I didn't exactly "get the idea" for Ouen so much as just… start writing, make up random town names and gym leaders, and eventually make a map around those. There isn't really a central concept of any kind behind it; I just wanted to make up a region, so I made up places that sounded cool and stuffed them into a haphazardly strung-together region which then got development as I wrote.
[11/27/2011 19:05:16]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
Oh, my. Another one of those informationy/calm/transition chapters that segue(sp?) into a really, really eventful one. I see a lot of character development that encourages a lot of hope for the relationship between May and everyone and her soul-searchingness.
I'm even more pumped for what happens next now. Scyther is one of my very favorite characters and though given the current state of the swarm, I'm not worried for his life, but there's just so many ways that could turn out. This chapter is one of those that adds to the characters' likeability, and makes it very easy to cheer for and want the best for them.
We're all on our toes for the coming developments, I'm sure.
[11/26/2011 21:37:41]
DarkUmbreon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 59: December
i noticed when mark is talking bout his pokedex is says "pokemon had had been withing a certain radius" should i be he had?Reply: "That had", actually. Fixed.
[11/26/2011 19:57:24]
Wraitheon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 13: The Black Desert
Odd that Game Freak decided to make a poison/dark type scorpion pokemon in generation 4. things that make ya go hmm…
[11/23/2011 18:37:43]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
Fallegur kafli, yndislegur. Þú skrifar af mikilli dýpt og næmni. Ég get ekki gagnrýnt neitt í þessum kafla, hvet þig bara til að halda áfram á þessari braut.
[11/17/2011 18:12:39]
PinkPanda11
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 26: Dead or Alive
I feel like May should have reacted more to somebody's coming back to life, or at least said, "I miss you" or something along those lines. I don't know, but she acted as if this happened to her everyday. If they're good enough friends to travel around the world together, May should have missed him or felt something. Otherwise, this was a great chapter!Reply: This is an old chapter and I don't know what the hell I was thinking when I wrote it.
[11/16/2011 00:23:50]
Deoxor
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Mew Hunter
"An abandoned Charmeleon, a baby Eevee who didn’t know what Pokémon training was, a Sandshrew who had just gained his very first bit of confidence, a starved, weird Gyarados, and a depressed Scyther."
This part just made me crack up. I know it's not necessarily funny, but the exact wording you used for Gyrados was just too much.
Also, you forgot to mention Dratini.
And finally, the Pokemon Mark catches all seem too obvious. Honestly, it actually surprised me when Scyther leaped out the window rather than just join Mark right away. And I've noticed that while half of Mark's team can talk as well as a few other occuring Pokemon, the only one that surprised people was Gyrados. They all reacted when Gyrados spoke, but when Charmeleon, or Scyther, or Kabutops spoke, they just acted as though it were normal.Reply: Dratini wasn't mentioned because there wasn't anything off about him to Mark's knowledge that could have been listed in that sentence.
Gyarados is the only Pokémon that actually, physically speaks human. The other Pokémon aren't speaking human; they're speaking Pokémon speech, which is translated in the narration because Mark understands it (as established in the first chapter).
[10/30/2011 21:22:24]
Deoxor
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 9: Mew's Escape
Oddly enough, the Pokemon that it asked me to type in the name for was Larvitar…..
Anyways, that was super-duper sad, I almost cried when you described poor Mew.
[10/30/2011 20:52:21]
Deoxor
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Book
I have always thought about what your average Mewthree would look like, and I guess this is a pretty good idea. Scary, wish I could've known what the one it's tied with is. You probably did that for suspense, right?
[10/30/2011 18:58:57]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 57: Three Conversations
Þetta var frábær kafli, Hlín. Samtölin algjörlega frábær. Og líka flott að byrja kaflann í miðjum bardaga. Breytingin á May dýpkar, án þess að verða óraunveruleg. Þetta er mjög trúverðug persóna sem þú hefur skapað, og hennar þroskaferli mjög trúverðugt.
Enskan í fyrri hluta kaflans fannst mér sums staðar ekki nógu vönduð. Orðalagið, orðaröðin á setningunum var ruglingsleg eða illskiljanleg, kannski voru smáorð sem hefði mátt sleppa.
[10/03/2011 22:28:45]
(anonK)
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
"I think we ought to read only the kind of books that wound and stab us. If the book we are reading doesn't wake us up with a blow on the head, what are we reading it for?" Franz Kafka
I like what you are doing, Butterfree. I could have my little words here, but what would they be next to yours?
[09/26/2011 03:13:12]
Idiot who forgot what was going on
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 57: Three Conversations
Wait, what? When did Scyther die? I forgot.Reply: In chapter 10, before he joined Mark. The Mew Hunter's Fangcat fought him and killed him, but Mew resurrected him.
[09/26/2011 03:05:17]
tomtomtomtom
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
o saddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd is chapter 58 the trollReply: What?
[09/21/2011 20:32:52]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari
Stuttur kafli. Þú lýsir því vel hvernig May er að þroskast og breytast. Hún er bæði meðvitað að reyna að gæta orða sinna gagnvart pokemonunum, og svo ómeðvitað er hún meira hugsi og alvarlegri, einhvern veginn.
Ég skil ekki af hverju er allt í einu talað um Chaletwo í pokebolta, er hann ekki inni í hausnum á Mark?Reply: Hann er á báðum stöðum. Líkamlega er hann í pokébolta sem er inni á tölvukerfinu, en hann er búinn að tengja sig hugrænt við Mark til að geta talað við hann. Þarna er talað um að Chaletwo hafi samþykkt að vera sendur út í líkamlegu formi, þ.e. pokéboltinn hans tekinn út af tölvukerfinu og hann síðan sendur út með venjulegum hætti.
[09/02/2011 10:59:24]
sarahc
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
…oh. My. Arceus. This is one of the best chapters I think I've ever read, Butterfree.
[08/17/2011 02:05:25]
Rotom4m
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
letalligon ;_;
[08/16/2011 11:02:03]
Lucaaa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
I… I just…
I've never commented on this before (as far as I can remember), but these past few chapters have just…
They're starting to make me tear up, okay? I've really connected with your characters and now that they're all separating and fighting with each other it's really just starting to get to me.
On a side note, I'm not entirely sure why but the very end of the bit with Stantler made me want to cry. Specifically, her bit about her old trainer. It was touching.
Anyway, you're a very good writer and you're rather inspirational to me. I hope that someday my writing can be half as good as yours.
[08/13/2011 05:04:36]