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sarahc
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 5: The Lake of Purity
Impressive!
[05/30/2010 20:00:46]
clockberries
Story: The Fall of a Leader
Chapter: Part III: Love
I just noticed that at the end of this chapter you talk about Stormblade's eyes… Don't you mean "eye"?
[05/13/2010 18:20:24]
DaLucaray
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 31: Spirit
Wad Caletwo just making exuces when he said he was to weak to use death stare on them? Or did he just not want to kill his creations?Reply: That's open for interpretation. :P Not wanting to kill his own creations is at least part of it.
[05/08/2010 00:51:53]
mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart
Þetta var frábær kafli. Útskýrir margt. Ég á samt fullt í fangi með að fylgjast með, muna allt úr fyrri köflum o.s.frv.
[05/07/2010 21:52:04]
DaLucaray
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Mammal, the Monster and the Mental Change
Raikou is not a tiger. And It's one of my favorite legendays, too.Reply: Yes, it is. Or rather, obviously it's a Pokémon, but yes, it definitely is "tiger-like". It's a big yellow four-legged furry creature with black stripes, and even if you could argue with Suicune and Entei, I've never heard anyone give a single convincing argument for Raikou being more canine than feline.
[05/05/2010 22:02:31]
HotTorchic
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53 Extra: April Fools
This… is… so perfectly lame! The esscense of love! *snorts*
[05/04/2010 15:06:19]
DaLucaray
Story: Scyther's Story
Chapter: Part III: First Prey
I don't understand the part where he's explaining why he should go after a boy, not a girl.Reply: He is basically deducing that the boy is less likely to just run away and more likely to try to battle him, based on what he knows of humans.
[05/03/2010 13:43:14]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 16: The Third Badge
For some reason, I picture Mega Sting working like an inverted Trump Card; it would start out powerful then weaken with usage.
[05/03/2010 01:14:30]
SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 9: Mew's Escape
I find it funny that Mark knows a mere fraction of what most Pokemon fans know.
*Edit* Hmmm. I don't think it was this chapter now, but in one of the earlier ones, Mark kept commenting about not knowing his Pokemon's attacks/such.Reply: …wait, huh? What is Mark not knowing in this chapter? o_O
[05/03/2010 00:47:28]
DaLucaray
Story: Scyther's Story
Chapter: Part II: Friendship
I have a syther named Razor. She was named after a person from a non-poke'mon story of mine, though.
[05/02/2010 20:05:21]
ShadowNc
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53 Extra: April Fools
After I read this I thought to myself, "This isn't right, love makes Dragonfree barf…" Yes, I litterally thought that.
[04/20/2010 21:02:43]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: The Pokémon Festival – May 23rd: The Pokémon Frenzy Tournament
OOH…scintillating. i have to say, i have never seen a tournament described in as much detail as this one. it describes each battle in sufficient detail to paint a vivid picture, but also doesn't stretch it out and make it boring. again, nice twist with the sibling rivalry between Scyther and Charizard.
Neokopa
[04/20/2010 14:38:55]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 16: The Third Badge
Again, great work. Nice twist regarding the Scorplack / Mitch thing
I've read the section on your coincidences (razor claw etc…) and wondered… is it just me that scorplack not only has the same first syllable, but looks similar too? and also the same typing for each evolution (like the Dex ambiguity)? Or…was Scorplack thought up after the DP dex?Reply: Scorplack is the very first non-hybrid fake Pokémon I ever created, so no, it isn't thought up after the D/P dex; in fact, I'm pretty sure it was before R/S came out. But really, it isn't that much of a fantastic coincidence that scorpion Pokémon have a name beginning with some variation on "Scor", and the only real similarities between Skorupi/Drapion and Scorplack are simply what both of them take from real scorpions, so I wouldn't exactly call it a remarkable similarity. And Bug/Poison and Dark/Poison are pretty much the most obvious types for scorpion Pokémon to be (Bug because they're arachnids, Poison because they're venomous, and Dark because they're nocturnal and have a sinister reputation).
[04/19/2010 19:25:18]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 13: The Black Desert
Absolutely epic. great detail about the Scorplack invasion, no improvements at all.
Oh, one question: does the three of Charizard (from charmeleon (seen the art)), Butterfree and Scyther end up being released and meet up with the Mew Hunter's Fangcat? or are the three mascots the inspiration for the story itself? just wondering…
i know ill probably get told "read it for yourself", but…curiosity for the sake of curiosity.
P.S/ im sorry about double posts - its a security setting which posts anything with a script relating to an e-mail adress gets sent twice (in case the first file gets lost - dont ask) anyway, ive turned it off for my particular e-mail , so no double posts!
NeokopaReply: The Charizard, Butterfree and Scyther in this story have nothing to do with the site mascots; it just happens that they're my favorite Pokémon and therefore when I was twelve I wanted to stick them everywhere. The Mew Hunter's Fangcat, likewise, is completely unrelated to the random Fangcat I stuck into the splash page backstory. Don't think there is any relation between the two.
[04/19/2010 18:18:55]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 11: The Lizard and the Mantis
Once again, great twist regarding the feudal feelings between Charmeleon and Scyther, and im curious to find out how the story goes (regarding treachery / death / fighting etc.)
As per usual, my only improvement would be between the sentences below:
"Scyther suddenly leapt at him, his scythes raised… …Suddenly, he had no face and was throwing a black and red Pokéball at Mew"
I think that the concept of Mark having nightmarks too abrupt and over too quickly. Again, perhaps you could build suspense up before Mark realises it was just a dream, just to bulk it out a bit.
Again, just a suggestion
Neokopa
[04/19/2010 17:50:40]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Mew Hunter
Commenting again, excellent twist, regarding the Mew Hunter. I must admit…it is rather odd to witness death in Pokemon, simply because…you just don't really think about them when they get hit by attacks (it's true, i always wondered whether Guillotine cut a pokemon in half, but they could be healed…).
Great chapter, and one of the highlights so far is the last paragraph (regarding Mark's Team). Two words. E-PIC.
;0)
[04/19/2010 17:33:32]
Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones
Excellent story do far, i'd just like to say. excellent plot, the same style of names Mr. Tajiri relentlessly uses, gripping, and i love how the whole charmander plot ties in with Rick's bro / May etc.
However, and i am aware the ILCOE version was your less-evolved style of writing, perhaps you could update Chapters 7 and 8. Personally, i felt that the battles were a bit vague and abrupt, so perhaps (if you take note of this) you could 'fill it out', if you know what i mean. i don't necessarily mean with new attacks (i gather that Mark discovering new moves may be part of the plot), but perhaps bringing it to the standard of the Moltres battle, and maybe add some more description (emphasizing the monotony and boredom of the whole ordeal). after all, it is just a suggestion.
Nevertheless, a great script so far, and if this is what you achieved when you were 14 years old, i can't wait to post on the style of writing to come !!
Great work, great website, Neokopa
[04/19/2010 16:38:46]
ShinyRedEon =D
Story: The Fall of a Leader
Chapter: Part VII: Downfall
*sobs*
[04/19/2010 10:42:13]
ShinyRedEon =D
Story: The Fall of a Leader
Chapter: Part VI: Stalker
o.O;;; you sure mention sex alot.Reply: When the story calls for it, yes. I hope you noticed this story is rated R.
[04/19/2010 10:29:20]
ShinyRedEon =D
Story: The Fall of a Leader
Chapter: Part V: Leader
wow, that battle was amazing. 8D
I noticed an error, you said: The two Scyther flew up and zoomed between the trees back out of the forest. But Shadowdart had his wing cut so he couldn't posibly be flying so soon.
[04/19/2010 09:25:28]