Comments on Chapter 70 Extra: Not Alone
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likeafinalboss
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70 Extra: Not Alone
It's awesome. Chaletwo has issues, Waraider and friends have issues, and there's a Pachirisu who's too much of an innocent precious Poffin to understand issues. I feel horrible for reading it and want to give them all hugs. 10/10.
Waraider's gotten a lot of characterization despite having so little screentime (fictime? paragraphtime?) when compared to the main cast, and he's completely defied my attempts to figure out what exactly his issues are beyond a few hazy guesses regarding internal conflict and uncertainty.
You've really created an amazing character in Waraider, and even though the structure of the fic is discouraging me from hoping to see more of him, it'd be nice if it happened.
[07/01/2016 03:58:45]
Rindstone
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70 Extra: Not Alone
I like Waraider even more now. I think there should be a comma in between "So he leaves them alone and retreats to some of the places that he likes" and "where he feels a little better,"?
[06/29/2016 15:20:51]
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