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CuriousJolteon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

"'Or are they going to ask Tyranitar himself, and he’ll tell them I said he should die?' May paced off towards a nearby rock and leaned against it with one hand for a little while as she rubbed her forehead. Tyranitar glanced uncomfortably at Mark."

I didn't realize it on my first reread without commentary, but this really sets up Tyranitar's actual conversation with the police later.

Reply: Funnily enough that wasn't actually decided on until quite a while after I wrote this chapter! But it is of course something that follows from it - Tyranitar gives himself up specifically hoping to make them think he just did it on his own and May's not responsible.

Thanks for all the commentary you've been making! Really enjoyed reading your comments, and lots of good points made. Hope you're enjoying the reread!

[06/08/2024 13:03:03]

Latias spirit
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

TYRANITAR KILLED TAYLOR AAAAAAHHHHHHHH! Thinking about Taylor's body makes me want to puke.

[01/11/2016 07:40:28]

jolty
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

but… mark and may…

[11/05/2012 21:48:10]

ShinyCharizard
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

She shouldn't have released Tyranitar

[06/28/2012 02:02:48]

mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Tvær spurningar: Þegar þau Taylor ætla að keppa í rjóðrinu talar May um að hann verði með 4 klón á móti hennar sex, þó Mewtwo2 sé úti. Var ekki Mewtwo2 einn af þessum 4?
Í lok kaflans, I doubt they'd release him? Verður Mewtwo2 lokaður inni í pokebolta í stríðinu? Getur hann ekki losnað út sjálfur, hann er klón þannig að hann hugsar ekki sjálfstætt, er það þess vegna?
Mewtwo2 er klón, hann er ekki goðsagnapokemon, af hverju er þá mikilvægt að hann verði lokaður inni?

Umsögn: Viðbrögð May við tapinu eru áhugaverð, vel lýst. Þú kannt líka að koma manni á óvart, mér hálfbrá þegar May sagði að þau hefðu verið í rjóðri Taylors. Svo finnst mér viðbrögð þeirra við dauða Taylors raunsönn, en fyrir löngu þegar hinn strákurinn var næstum dauður eftir árás í rjóðri, þá fannst mér viðbrögð Marks svo óraunveruleg, eða mig minnir það.

Reply: Taylor á fimm klón alls en mátti bara nota fjögur í hverjum bardaga. May vildi sem sagt keppa á móti hinum fjórum klónunum hans (þess vegna sagði hún "just your other four clones…").

Það er rétt hjá þér að Mewtwo^2 hugsar ekki sjálfstætt og gæti þess vegna ekki losnað út. Hann er ekki goðsagnapokémon beinlínis, en hann er klón af goðsagnapokémoni, þannig að hann tekur þátt í stríðinu ef hann er ekki inni í bolta.

[07/27/2011 21:44:28]

Unknown
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Wow! Cool story!

I've read all of your chapters, but haven't reviewed untill the latest - this one.

I really like your battle scenes. Throughout the whole league, I could feel that each battle was going to have a degree of epicness to it.

Your deaths are a always surprising though … when Tryanitar crushed Taylor, it was like Scyther all over again (when he attacked Nightmare's trainer). I couldn't absorb it fast enough, but it was still what happened.

I can't tell if the story's over or not though, since you put 'extra' below it … I'm assuming it's not though, if it was, that's just leaving too many things untended too.

But maybe May will finnaly change her approach with Pokemon? ;) I like geussing what'll happen.

Reply: Hi, and thanks for reading. No, the story is not over - the "Extra" is just one of several extras that come with a few random chapters (they're also found on the menu). In fact, I'm currently reading over chapter 54 and will be posting it in a bit.

[06/23/2010 00:39:24]

MaxMaxHolly
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Marks sudden revalation that tyranitar was underdevoled seemed out of character to a degree.

Reply: Mm, somewhat uncharacteristically insightful, maybe, but even then, I don't think it's too much of a stretch. After all, Tyranitar's speech was earlier described as childish, and his logic and general demeanor are very childlike as well. It shouldn't take a monumental revelation to figure maybe he just really is a child. Of course, I'm the author, so I'm not the best person to judge.

[06/21/2010 01:07:27]

ShinyRedEon =D
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

yay Taylor's dead. but why did may have to release Tyranitar *sobs* :{

yeah it might sound disturbing that im more upset about Tyranitar leaving that Taylor dying but im just like that ^-^

[04/13/2010 04:00:01]

lullelulle
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Ops, sorry my bad, I thought it was some kind of open ending (a friend of mine said so), anyone knows where I can find more novels similar to this (not short stories)

[04/07/2010 18:27:09]

puredragon222
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Holy crap! At first, as soon as he died, I was expecting this to be a dream Mark had, but then… WHOA I LIKE TYRANITAR NOW EVEN THOUGH HE IS A BIG BAD SCARY BEASTIE

[04/07/2010 11:38:54]

Steele
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

W-what the hell? Taylor is… dead. And… why did Tyranitar, my second favorite Pokémon of this fic, have to go? ;_;

[04/04/2010 08:04:11]

Error
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

I liked the original better.

Reply: …this is a joke, right?

[04/03/2010 22:22:17]

lullelulle
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

You should really write an epilogue, or even better a second book :D

Btw The quest for legends was awesome, thanks for writing it

Reply: Um. It's not over. o_O

[04/03/2010 20:22:33]

Raitora Kuro Yamiraku
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Tyranitar. Oh, Tyranitar. Oh, you bloody awesome Tyranitar. XD May, he killed for you, come on. It makes me think of a guard dog that injures a burglar, and is then euthanized. It's unfair and stupid, especially considering they were just trying to make their owner happy.







May… you bitch.

Reply: Yeah, you know, except for the part where somebody died. And where it was an unprovoked attack. And where Tyranitar was just released, not killed.

Think of it how you like, but you have to admit it's a biiiiit different from guard dogs being euthanized for doing their job. o.O

[04/03/2010 07:54:50]

elementalpenguin
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Ugh. I think I'm going tobe sick. God, how do you do such amazing things with a pokemon fanfic?
I think we need to take a vote on most tortured soul now - Tyranitar or Gyarados?

[04/03/2010 07:10:54]

waterwerewolf
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Dragonfree, I don't know what to say. I had a horrible feeling that the other chapter 53 might have been the real one. If it had been then a fanfic that will one day have fandoms of its own would have been ruined, then I say my mistake re-read both chapters and laughed for ages.

[04/02/2010 19:30:14]

Oh-Paching
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

I… what… wow. I thought I clicked the wrong link and this was the joke. O_o But honestly, this was extremely well-written. I actually felt sorry for May when she had to release Tyranitar. He didn't really know that it was wrong! Wow.

Very morbid.

[04/02/2010 16:00:43]

Mudkipper
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Oh my goodness, that's so sick and twisted! I'm still dazed and confused from reading that. Now that I think of it, I'm starting to want the fake chapter to be the real one and vice-versa.

[04/02/2010 13:51:20]

Leaving_a_comment
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

My jaw dropped when Taylor died, I kept expecting this to be another joke. Did you plan this on purpose?
Oh wow, oh wow this was good. Someone make popcorn! This is really getting interesting.

[04/02/2010 05:21:40]

SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 53: Away

Wow. Wow. For once at least a part of my prediction is accurate…But I'd never imagine it happening that way. Wow. I'm in awe. Amazing chapter, you've dispensed a lot of suspense but built up a whole lot more in the process.

[04/02/2010 00:01:56]

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