Comments on The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
sarahc
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 5: The Pokédex
So how does Mark plan to reconcile his out-of-date-but-awesome-looking Pokédex with all the RSE/made-up Pokémon he's going to find?Reply: It's not out-of-date as in doesn't-have-all-the-Pokémon-in-it; the universe of this fic assumes all Pokémon have always been known. It's just technologically out of date, connecting with a later plot point.
[06/13/2010 02:36:37]
ShinyRedEon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 4: Another Pokémon on the Road
Is that forth part about that Eevee?Reply: Both the fourth and sixth "sections" there are from Eevee's point of view.
[04/08/2010 09:39:44]
ShinyRedEon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
Yeah, now that i read it agian it does seem kida like the class is empty. Also I don't think a teacher would call one of her students idiot… -_-;;;
[04/08/2010 09:19:47]
ShinyRedEon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
Pokemon speech, okay…. I think you did the character building really well though.
[04/08/2010 09:16:05]
ShinyRedEon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
I love the description, it just makes me want to read the rest of the story and find out what happens. Im excited now 8D, even though i was just reading it cuz i was going crazy with boredom.
[04/08/2010 09:11:22]
ShinyRedEon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
Hmmmmm like it. Even though it keeps moving between past and present tence.
[04/08/2010 09:06:44]
blankblankblank
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
please continue story
[12/16/2009 14:03:48]
Natural
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
Amazing story, well written and full of excitement. when will the next one come out?Reply: Of this version, unfortunately, it will probably be a while, since I tend to feel a lot more like writing something completely new in the other version than rewriting the same chapters for the billionth time.
[09/20/2009 20:19:37]
Donny
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
OOOOOOHHH!!! when's the next chapter due?Reply: Of this version, I really don't know; I'm working on the ILCOE a lot more these days and the IALCOTN is kind of on a hiatus. :/
[07/04/2009 01:06:27]
Chucho
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 3: The Test
How can the final for a class be only ten questions?Reply: It's not ten questions; it's an integer grade out of ten (which is what I'm used to from our school system).
[06/15/2009 03:30:42]
Chucho
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
For the beginning, I think you should add a bit more of the agitation from the classroom to contrast the calmness of the outdoors. The Rattata thing seemed sort of random, to be honest.
I don't know why, but "Er" seems to hint at nervousness more than apathy. Perhaps it's the teeth clenching.
I /hate/ it when people say whatever. Perhaps it's because my mother says it a lot and I hate my mother, or maybe it's because the similar things I say instead like "Okay." at least acknowledge that the person said something at all. I think the first.
First person thoughts actually work for this. It's nice. I read it a second time, however, and it seems sort of /aggressive/.
It feels as if the class was empty, so it took a while to realize that there were children exiting after the bell rang. Perhaps you could have the children laugh at one of his remarks, like in the old version of this chapter.
I think "to match his mood." is unnecessary, as there's been stories with psychic weather since forever. As you sort of say, it's a mocking of my interpretation skills.
Ooh… Cliffhanger. :3Reply: You make good points; thanks for the crit. :3 Particularly on the class feeling empty - I didn't notice it before, but now I definitely see it.
About the "Er", it was not precisely meant to express apathy; it was more of a general hesitation thing.
I need to revise the IALCOTN soon…
[06/14/2009 21:24:31]
Giratar
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
This is REALLY good. I can't wait for the next chapter.
[05/03/2009 22:25:41]
flygonmaster
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
nice fanfic
[04/05/2009 15:55:56]
Groudon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
Not realy.
Its Grate!!!
[03/21/2009 15:11:47]
Groudon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 1: Ultimatum
NO PICTURES!!
BORRING!!!!!!!
[03/21/2009 15:10:37]
spheal6278
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
ooooooo……nice……update soon please
[02/21/2009 08:15:11]
Spider
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
I like the story a lot. The way it is set up, the way the main characters are expressive and have personalities, makes this sroty unique. When is the next chapter going to be able to be viewed?
[01/24/2009 08:11:44]
Nemesis
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Lost Pokémon
Anything I say you have probably heard before. But here goes nothing.
This chapter, while slightly slow, gives us some great character interactions between Mark and his family. Even though Mark is hardly the most likeable protagonist, I do feel sorry for him, as his parents don't really seem to care about his happiness that much.
The Charmander appearing in the road after that moment shows an interesting start of Mark's journey. It goes to show that even at this stage, Mark's story is so much more different then other trainers.
Looking forward to reading more.
[01/23/2009 07:12:27]
ThePhantomCorrector
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 6: The Lake of Purity
I can't wait for the next chapter in this version!
[01/16/2009 20:13:04]
Gacatail
Story: The Quest for the Legends (IALCOTN)
Chapter: Chapter 4: Another Pokémon on the Road
You referred to Route 301 as 201 in the third paragraph after the first break thing. =P
[01/12/2009 00:35:52]