<_> Hurg. Hi. Can't make a decently long post, so here's a (possible) error for ya:
She looked up as
they approached, put the book on the desk and leaned towards the window. “Oh, early trainers,” she said. “Hello. Are you registering for the League this year?
There's a strangely placed space in the middle of the sentence there. Also, the first sentence seems a bit odd, I can't quite say what it is, but how "She looked up as they approached, put the book on the desk and leaned towards the window." sounds strange to me, maybe its how those actions are listed.
That's all what I could spot (for now)…
*_* The league is now my favorite place in the fic for some reason, maybe because SOMETHING could happen here and my intuition is kicking in…but I can't quite put my finger on it. I think its the word:
DISQUALIFIED!!! for some strange reason, but I could be wrong. As for Quilava, didn't he need to be traded back OFFICIALLY in order for May to really have it? That's going to couse some problems for sure… >_>
Anyway, good chapter! ^_^
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