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Chapter 18: Enemies Forever (commentary)
In this chapter, May breezily acts like she didn't just leave Mark behind in Scorpio City, Mitch may or may not have remote soporific abilities, I poke fun at fourteen-year-old typos, we pointlessly watch Nurse Joy of Scorpio City transfer Sandslash, Marge gets a makeover, I clumsily try to justify making Mark not use Scyther immediately, Dratini gets to evolve after a very quick and kludgy paragraph acknowledging that he's neglected, the Scyther-Charmeleon subplot continues dramatically, I reference Satan, and I show you where, once upon a time, the fic also referenced George Bush and Saddam Hussein.
In this chapter, May breezily acts like she didn't just leave Mark behind in Scorpio City, Mitch may or may not have remote soporific abilities, I poke fun at fourteen-year-old typos, we pointlessly watch Nurse Joy of Scorpio City transfer Sandslash, Marge gets a makeover, I clumsily try to justify making Mark not use Scyther immediately, Dratini gets to evolve after a very quick and kludgy paragraph acknowledging that he's neglected, the Scyther-Charmeleon subplot continues dramatically, I reference Satan, and I show you where, once upon a time, the fic also referenced George Bush and Saddam Hussein.
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