Ah, good to see another chapter up. I know how much longer it can take to do editing than one might expect…
Robin seems to join up rather abruptly here. She kind of expresses interest out of the blue, even though presumably the crew's been hanging out with her for a few hours at least, waiting for Mark to wake up. So why didn't she ask to join up with them earlier, presumably during the part where they were getting the story about how the end of the world is coming? In general, there's some kind of awkward dialogue in here that primarily comes of Robin or her mother saying things to Mark that seem like they ought to have been resolved before he woke up. Or perhaps you could swing it as her having brought this up before, but her mother wanted to speak to Chaletwo before making a decision–some of the things she asks you could reasonably only be answered by him.
But I think, really, that it would make more sense to just have the chapter open along the lines of, "Oh hey, this is Robin, she's going to be coming with us to capture the Color Dragons while you heal up," unless there were some particular facts you really wanted to impart in the dialogue that would get cut out.
Other than that, Robin's mom seems to have a kind of weird "yeah you go kids, out capturing all the legendaries without adult supervision" thing going on. She's not interested in alerting anybody else about this like, say, some gym leaders or other prominent trainers or something? Or the equivalent of the police/military/whomever you might hope would be around to deal with shit son the apocalypse? (Also not sure if this has been mentioned before, but has anybody kinda… noticed that the legendaries have almost all up and disappeared as of late? Most of them don't seem to get out much, but we're talking about something going on in *all* the regions, not just one…) She just seems surprisingly 0kay with the whole crazy affair, that's all, beyond just her daughter going off to help–more the idea that she's cool with the fate of the world resting on these particular three kids seems strange to me.
The line where Robin's mom wants to know why they don't just kill all the legendaries cracked me up for reasons that should hopefully become apparent very soon…
Mmmm, I'm sure it's going to be fun watching Chaletwo hang around in May's head for awhile. This was generally a quiet chapter, not all that much to say–but you've set things up nicely for entertaining trials to come, I think.
Are we ever going to actually see this fabled Community fanfic?