Comments on Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones

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Seren
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones

Okay, for real, Rick's line "let's hope it was just some random kid" was glorious. What happened to the nurse who went to fetch him to tell him there was a random kid waiting to earn his badge? Who knows, Rick is busy not caring that strangers are screwing with his gym!

Also I've totally been pronouncing it "Mewtwo-Squared" the entire time this story has been updating. I thought it was a neat little detail since it's supposed to be a super-clone of a super-clone, so like, exponentially stronger than the original, hence the "squared"… and I'm actually a little disappointed that that's not really how it was intended.

Reply: I mean, that's what I meant when I said I felt it made more sense in some imagined mathematical abstraction of super-cloning! I just didn't want to pronounce it "squared" because that's not a very powerful-sounding word. Hence "to the power of two", which then ultimately got shortened. Please do continue to pronounce it Mewtwo-squared.

[08/14/2018 23:06:07]

Neokopa
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones

Excellent story do far, i'd just like to say. excellent plot, the same style of names Mr. Tajiri relentlessly uses, gripping, and i love how the whole charmander plot ties in with Rick's bro / May etc.

However, and i am aware the ILCOE version was your less-evolved style of writing, perhaps you could update Chapters 7 and 8. Personally, i felt that the battles were a bit vague and abrupt, so perhaps (if you take note of this) you could 'fill it out', if you know what i mean. i don't necessarily mean with new attacks (i gather that Mark discovering new moves may be part of the plot), but perhaps bringing it to the standard of the Moltres battle, and maybe add some more description (emphasizing the monotony and boredom of the whole ordeal). after all, it is just a suggestion.

Nevertheless, a great script so far, and if this is what you achieved when you were 14 years old, i can't wait to post on the style of writing to come !!

Great work, great website, Neokopa

[04/19/2010 16:38:46]

shadow_lugia
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones

What were those lights doing, anyway? Were they of any signifigance? Or were they just random?

Reply: Just an attempt at realistic light switches that might be in a Pokémon Gym, pretty much. :/

[06/23/2009 00:33:03]

mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones

Nú fer þetta að verða spennandi.

[11/20/2008 22:14:21]

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