Comments on Chapter 70: Waraider

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CuriousJolteon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

I think this is one of my favorite chapters. I'm also happy that I guessed the twist - partly based on what would be interesting, but I think there were also some pretty big hints in the last few chapters. Presumably the same hints that led to you determining what his deal was.

Waraider definitely does come off neurodivergent, maybe autistic. I think it does not seem like a stereotype. It's the type of thing that might feel more accurate with further exploration on your part to get it right, but I certainly wouldn't think of it as offensive or anything. Also, I think a lot of your characters have autistic traits. There are a lot of characters who struggle with socializing "correctly," who have very rigid thought processes, who alternate between quiet uncertainty and unintentionally being loud and annoying and then unsure why they were taken the wrong way. There's the way characters like Mark have particular interests they've been obsessed over for years. I've been finding it interesting to think about upon reading through the fic now, with more of an understanding of this stuff than I ever had in 2009 to… 2011? 2012? I think I stopped reading chapters as they came out sometime around the safari zone. The NaNo rewrites took a long time.

[06/13/2024 19:27:49]

mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

Þetta er frábær kafli. Að vísu fannst mér erfitt að fylgja bardaganum, en plottið í lok kaflans kemur á óvart og hefur dýpt og skírskotun til margs í sálarlífi okkar mannanna.

[04/10/2017 07:22:07]

Happy
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

I've just done a massive catchup binge of pretty much every chapter from this year & I am hooting + hollering at this chapter, it is so great

I WANT THIS TO BE LIKE, THE "IT WAS HIS SLED" MOMENT OF THIS ARC
"THE HORSE HAS SCHIZOPHRENIA"

Was this their underlying concept from the start, or a matter of "what am I going to do with these eight horses my twelve-year-old self came up with"?? Immediately catapulted from uninteresting preteen muse to absolutely brilliant

Also it helps that I find horses flipping out the funniest thing, so these seven screeching horses trapped in a box of black fire as the earth collapses around them is. really good

You already nod to it in the next chapter, but I really like that mark shines in this chapter & he doesn't need to be a stomping, headstrong 'hero' to do so! That all he needs is to Bee Himself
I'm a huge fan of stories that employ diplomacy and Friendship (note: not The Power Of Friendship To Fight An Enemy To Death, that's against the point); also, weird psychology-based reality-bending; so I'm extremely fond of how this chapter wraps up. Also, because horses. Anyway keep doing you

PS I love that ur mum reads ur pokemon fanfiction!!!

[12/06/2016 19:47:47]

Rindstone
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

It says strong spirit spirit form instead of strong spirit form.

[07/15/2016 03:36:57]

Rindstone
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

Wouldn't Mark have already known what teleportation feels like from that Exeggcute teleporting him to Green Town? Or is it different because Felix was teleporting repeatedly?

Reply: Yeah, it's different because he's doing it repeatedly. Teleporting once is mildly disorienting for a second, but many teleports in a row really start to mess with your brain.

[06/15/2016 02:37:37]

Rindstone
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 70: Waraider

I like this chapter so much I think I'll explode. It is now my favorite chapter.

[06/08/2016 03:08:40]

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