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Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

I love the way the three of them adress Raudra and Puragon differently; Mark as "The red one and the white one", which is an obvious, first-glance type of discription; May, as "the fire-type and the ice-type", which is the strategic, slightly ogjectifying way; and Alan as "the one on the left and the one on the right", which has nothing to do with the dragons themself and only about where they are, and is the least objectifying form. All in-character and well done.

Reply: You have no idea how much it delights me that someone notices these silly little things.

[10/27/2012 17:47:45]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

Þetta er verulega skrítið í byrjun:
Af hverju vill Mark ekki hleypa Gyarados út? Samt getur hann hleypt honum út í bardaga…in Sandslashes place?
Demantarnir eru um háls Gyarados og háls einhvers annars, var það ekki?
Svo er Gyarados í sjónum, svo honum var hleypt út.

Annars er þetta fínn kafli.

Reply: Chaletwo hefur áhyggjur af að Gyarados myndi reyna aftur að brjóta gimsteinana ef honum væri hleypt út og látinn eiga sig (þarna voru þau bara að bíða og pokémonarnir voru úti að drepa tímann). Á meðan fylgst væri með honum, eins og þegar þau eru að undirbúa bardaga, gæti Gyarados hins vegar ekki brotið steinana án þess að það væri tekið eftir því og þá mætti einfaldlega kalla hann aftur inn í kúluna, svo Chaletwo telur það óhætt að hleypa honum út (það er líka hálfnauðsynlegt, þar sem Gyarados er mikils virði í bardaga og þá sérstaklega á móti drekum). Hver þjálfari getur hins vegar bara haft sex pokémona með sér í einu, svo til að hafa Gyarados með í bardaganum þurfti hann að koma í staðinn fyrir Sandslash (sem hefur takmarkaða getu til að ráðast á fljúgandi dreka). Mark skiptir Sandslash út fyrir Gyarados áður en hann sést úti. (Það er gefið í skyn með "…he called, taking out his Pokédex and the Ground Pokémon’s ball", þ.e. hann er að fara að nota pokédexið til að skipta á Sandslash og Gyarados, eins og hann var að tala um að hann ætlaði að gera.)

Gyarados er með gimsteinana sem Suicune er í. Spirit, sem May á, er með gimsteinana sem Entei er í.

[08/07/2011 16:44:08]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

I feel like I am spoiled being able to read through your story so far in a few days. Any idea when the next chapter will be posted? Really great story, love the reality of death and injury of battling (makes it all more "real") and the very dynamic relationships between the humans and pokemon (personalities, values, etc).

Reply: I only have a little bit left of chapter 56; it's just getting it to end right.

[03/01/2011 05:30:03]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

Okay, first of all, wow. I've been doing an archive binge over the past couple of days, and let me start by saying this is one of the best stories I've ever read. A few questions:

-Is Letaligon's patricide subplot going anywhere soon?
-Are there any more fake legendaries planned beyond the ones revealed so far?
-How are you planning to integrate the 5th gen?
- Can I use some aspects of your world for my own fic? I don't mean Ouen or the War or anything, I'm referring to stuff like the Pokemon vs human language and the implementation of the 4-move limit.

Once again, great fic, and I'm sorry if it seems like I'm being overly demanding - remember, I read the whole fic over about 2 weeks. Can't wait for chapter 56!

Reply: Hi, and thanks. :3

- Letaligon's subplot is going somewhere soon, yes; Mark and May are heading to the Ouen Safari and after that to release Letaligon in Ruxido.
- No, there will be no more fake legendaries beyond the ones revealed so far, except that I'm not going to rule out the possibility that the Destroyer is one. (This is not an indication that it actually is; I just like being mysterious.)
- Fifth-generation will get integrated the same way the fourth was: once the games are released in English, fifth-generation Pokémon or moves may appear in any subsequent chapter as if they'd always been there but just happened never to come up.
- Sure. If you follow my ideas very closely I'd appreciate if you included a note crediting where it came from.

[01/25/2011 22:08:18]

Chimpchar from serebii
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

I was wondering if it would be ok with you if I used color dragons in a fan-fic story?but diffrent.just for me and my friends.I know i don't NEED to ask you but I'd feel
I quit my pokemorph fic.I think you are just a GREAT writer. this fic has made me lol ALOT.
but Is it ok i think of floatzel as russian with rotting teeth and that mo-whatshisname dudes name as mozart?lol

Reply: If it's just for you and your friends, sure.

And you can think of the characters however you like if that makes you enjoy it more. :P

[01/20/2011 01:26:11]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

please write more soon, i miss your fic :<

Reply: Right now I'm rewriting Scyther's Story, as detailed on the Quest Blog. I'd still like to finish chapter 56 before the end of the year, but I'm not sure I'll make it, what with all the stuff I have to do.

[11/21/2010 19:31:13]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

As always, there's a big shock letting itself out on us in the most disconcerting way. You've really got me interested on how the plot's going to continue now, because Alan going is going to hurt the group sooner or later.
But this way it will give them a chance to cool off. Alan saying "they're not coming" to Diamond gave me the impression that he wasn't at all happy in their company, more then he could handle.

The conversation between Mark and Chaletwo are … very real, in a way that Chaletwo's not being idealistic to explain himself. He's gone straight to the truth, but it's great to listen to. If you wanted me to feel confused about whether following Chaletwo's doing the right thing or not, then you've suceeded admirably. I guess I can see his side of the arguement, but I agree with Mark's more.
Suicine's master plan …. that was just surprising, because after Chaletwo described him as a 'gentlman' it just didn't seem like he'd pull that sort of a plot on Gyrados.
Oh and since I don't check in that often, it helps when you describe Alan's pokemon as the pokemon they are instead of thier name, so I can remember who's who, though I geuss I won't need to remember that now that he's gone back home …

[09/30/2010 22:12:26]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

This is really interesting. Alan leaving is a nice twist, didn't really expect that. Also, the color dragons were pretty nice. Your story is really shaping up. >3<

[08/31/2010 20:59:04]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

bleeeeeh, alan.

although, i can't say i'm surprised, Ash's kid would probably would have issues. unsurprising, but i sort of want to slap alan now, because i don't think (feel like??) he realizes what a jerk he's being right now in the middle of his personal quest for good. ._.

he seems like a different person now than when you first meet him… but then again, so does may. characterbuilding! woot!

yeah, i don't think alan will ever really get over this whole fiasco until he lets go of… uhh, everything. yeah i don't think he'll get over it.

and is it just me, or did someone else notice that alan sort of has an ego? like it's his business to fix everybody or rag on people repeatedly if they're wrong. like only he is right, and 'screw you other points of view, this is pokemon abuse!!'

not to say that it is a bad thing exactly, it makes him a nice person when he isn't being disgusted with you… it's just… wrong place and time for that sort of worldview, alan. in effect, grow up.

bwah :33

but anyways, i really liked this chapter. x33 too bad we prolly won't see alan getting all up in may's grill for stuff for a while. i sort of enjoyed seeing that, sadistically P:

and now i stop rambling.

[08/28/2010 12:14:14]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

Alan left because he's a very empathetic person who hates seeing violence or mistreatment of pokemon, and May does that all the time. Just being in her presence makes him sick now, since Taylor died. SInce the only thing they need to do now is training, Alan has no reason to be near her, and wants to leave so he doesn'tt feel horrible the entire time.
At least that's how I saw it.

Great chapter, Butterfree - It was nice to see a failure on the legendary capturing for once. What was it that you were talking about with one of the characters doing something not planned though? Was that Mark throwing the Master Ball? If so, can you tell us what the Master Ball *was* planned for?

Reply: No, it was Alan leaving. The chapter was supposed to just end with them realizing they needed a lot more training before being able to do this, but then all of a sudden Alan just got fed up and left. And since I didn't have anything planned for now that actually requires his presence, I just let him go instead of trying to force him back into the plan. I think it's more interesting this way, anyway.

Technically, they also completely failed at catching Suicune - it was just that then he got killed afterwards anyway.

[08/28/2010 07:49:12]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

to Shadow Serenity, if you look back, it shows that he transfers pokeballs and gets one of them from the PC system…i think

Reply: Shadow Serenity was talking about a different part from the one you're thinking of, where, yes, it was quite confusing (though he doesn't actually have seven Pokémon out at the same time).

[08/26/2010 23:38:43]

Raitora Kuro Yamiraku
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

Awesome chapter.

Alan… oh, Alan. Ever the downer.

I did catch several typos and more grammar mistakes, but I can't name them; I was too caught up in the battle to remember where they were. ^^;

[08/26/2010 16:04:19]

Shadow Serenity
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

Ah, this was well worth the wait. :D

One thing I noticed, though, is that when Mark was looking for his pokemon, he is carrying 7: Charizard, Jolteon, Letaligon, Sandslash, Dragonite, Scyther, and Gyarados.

At first I thought that perhaps this was intentional, that you decided to disregard the six-pokemon limit due to the nature of the plot/chapter. But then there was the scene where May actively switched out Mutark, and then actually made a comment about carrying 6 pokemon. Therefore, I assume Mark wasn't meant to have all seven on him at the time.

[08/26/2010 14:36:55]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

….Wow. I had a hard time keeping up with that. In a good way, I mean.

[08/26/2010 14:27:34]

Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 55: Unprepared

this chapter is really good but i dont get why alan left

[08/26/2010 09:20:33]

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