Comments on Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

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CuriousJolteon
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

It honestly is believable that Mark would accidentally call the paramedics doctors at least.

The Abra helping the paramedics is a really interesting throwaway world building detail.

I wish Mark or anyone reacted to Scyther's drama. One of the big things that makes it feel irrelevant is that in-universe no one else cares or does anything. It's always odd in general when Mark just watches some Pokemon have a long conversation or scene which he could easily participate in but he just doesn't do anything or have any thoughts about it.

[06/03/2024 15:42:30]

RandomReader
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

Late, but just a thought - couldn't "slaves" serve as a replacement for the use of the term "robots"? Perhaps it would be redundant with the use of "slave" later in the chapter, but then again, they're far enough apart it sounds okay when I think about it.

Reply: Yeah, definitely! That was one of the changes I made in the ILCOE patch version I just put up, which makes many such line edits I talk about wanting to change in the commentary.

[06/08/2022 01:24:50]

ShinyCharizard
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

Alright we have
A traumatized Gyrados,Charizard,Eevee, and if you push it slightly Leta
a Dragonair
a Sandslash
and a Murderous and Suicidal Scyther
AWESOMEST ADVENTURE EVER!!!!!

[06/26/2012 22:30:57]

mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

Þetta var frábær kafli. Útskýrir margt. Ég á samt fullt í fangi með að fylgjast með, muna allt úr fyrri köflum o.s.frv.

[05/07/2010 21:52:04]

Giratar
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

When Mark saw something with red eyes, was it a Mutark?

Reply: Actually, it was Spirit the Ninetales, whom I assume you've read about now since you've commented on chapter 33.

[05/06/2009 22:07:19]

Water
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart

Just a note to say I love your all fan fiction- you'd be a great writer!

Water x

[01/09/2009 19:47:48]

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