Comments on The Final Stretch – Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
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ILOVETHISFIC
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOEp)
Chapter: The Final Stretch – Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
Sorry. I just… Mew, Chalenor and Chaletwo? Yeah. The Creator, Preserver and Destroyer. I understand that. But Entei? It feels like you just randomly picked him from the (does quick math) 30 or so other legendaries. He's a minor character. When I read that part, the first thing I thought was "Okay, so the Legendary Beast Trio is the Legendary Beast Duo now, but why?" I have a solution though. Some of Entei's Pokédex entries claim that he's born whenever a volcano erupts. What if it's the other way around? What if, when Entei dies, if his soul can find an active volcano quickly enough, he is reborn and that volcano erupts?Reply: The other thirty legendaries didn't choose Spirit, nor were they condescending dicks who had their own, kind of exploitative plan going to escape the war by using mortal Pokémon. Any of the others would have been random; Entei was not. I already explained the narrative reasons I found it appropriate for him to die, but you kind of ignored those in favor of acting like I just wanted to kill a legendary and rolled a die. That's absolutely not why I killed him! I had no desire to kill off a random legendary just because, and didn't; I did it because I found it the right end for Entei's particular role in the story.
Meanwhile, I think it would genuinely be pretty random and pointless to hastily retcon that actually Entei's totally not dead if he finds an active volcano. What does that change or contribute to the narrative? Why is it better if Entei lives? To me, that wouldn't contribute anything other than undermining Spirit's chance to move on from this pretty questionable codependency she had going on with him.
Maybe we just have a philosophical difference, where you tend to feel that it's just generally better the more characters make it out alive. That's definitely not how I feel about stories. It's okay if you do! It's fine if you don't like that Entei died. All I can do is explain why I wrote it the way I did, and it's up to you whether you're happy with that answer or whether what I write is to your taste.
[03/04/2025 14:24:04]
ILOVETHISFIC
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOEp)
Chapter: The Final Stretch – Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
Why did Entei di? So random and so pointless. Please remove it.Reply: For narrative reasons. There's an irony that I like to Entei's very insistence that he had a better method to evade the War leading to his downfall. Additionally, Spirit's character arc is about her vain self-image revolving around being chosen, maintained in the face of Entei's selfishness and utter lack of giving a damn about her; Spirit ultimately failing to protect Entei, even as she tried far harder than he really deserved, was another fun bit of irony while also ultimately setting her free and giving her the chance to grow a new and healthier self-image that doesn't revolve around Entei.
You do realize it's very rude and kind of irritating to comment on other people's creative work ordering them to remove bits you don't like, right? You can express your opinion, and maybe if you do it in a thoughtful and convincing way (as opposed to just calling it "so random and pointless" without elaboration), I might even agree with you. But you don't get to just tell me to make the story different according to how you think it should go. It makes you sound very entitled. I hope you're not acting like this with other people who make things you enjoy!
[02/26/2025 00:43:20]
Nat
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOEp)
Chapter: The Final Stretch – Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
Damn, just… damn…
There’s been the theme of Legendaries being flawed, and not how Mark expected, for a very long time. And it’s true. They’re flawed, paranoid, aggressive, arrogant. But Arceus doesn’t seem all that better. With each new generation of Legends destined to be killed off, how are they ever meant to learn? How can they ever be motivated to learn, if the war is inevitable anyways? It’s pointless, there’s no reason to grow if they’re punished for it all the same.
And in the end, the four Legendaries who were really, really trying to do good, to save people, to break the cycle, are the ones who have to die. Chalenor, the unwilling Destroyer. Mew, who wanted Chalenor to be more than just a Destroyer but also couldn’t let go. Chaletwo, who feared death and just wanted to survive, but unwittingly caused this tragedy and needed to die to break the cycle. And Mewtwo^2… Never even got to have a life of its own…
They saved the world. Saved most of the Legendaries. Prevented millions of lives from being lost. But just… none of them wanted this to happen… Maybe blame can be assigned to all four in some capacity, but three tried their best, and one was just broken by grief…
[06/23/2022 11:14:28]
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