Yeah, definitely agreed on chapter 7 feeling a little empty. I'm not sure zooming in on May would have made it better, though! I fiddled around with trying to do that but raising the horizon looked weird, as did making her bigger while keeping the horizon and thus her eye level. Might have considered, like, just putting more stuff in the foreground, one way or another? Dunno. Probably would have been possible to go with some entirely different composition but by this point I'd already sketched her and didn't want to scrap the whole thing while on a timer to complete the project.
Not sure I'd want this one closer either; kind of want some breathing space around Mew, plus that the focal point being closer to the 1/3 mark is more pleasing than having it more up in the corner. The empty space on the balcony beside Mark does bug me, though! Maybe I should've just put something there. Or, as you say, some alternative composition, but I think I'd always arrange this one in a way where there's a fair amount of breathing space around Mew? The whole point here is freeing Mew, and it feels counterproductive to frame that very closely. Unless you had something in mind that's not occurring to me?
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