10/01/2018: Commentary: chapters 15 and 16Chapter 15: Darkness and Poison (commentary)
Chapter 16: The Third Badge (commentary)
Two chapters this week again! This time, I write in a character just to introduce another one of my ridiculously morbid fakemon; Sandshrew evolves and undergoes a sudden personality shift; May continues to not sound terribly competent but then actually does do something vaguely interesting, finally; I forget Dratini exists, again; we see the least interesting of the fic's gym battle twists; and Mitch is Mysterious™.
Commenting on: chapter 63