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mamma
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Stuttur kafli. Þú lýsir því vel hvernig May er að þroskast og breytast. Hún er bæði meðvitað að reyna að gæta orða sinna gagnvart pokemonunum, og svo ómeðvitað er hún meira hugsi og alvarlegri, einhvern veginn.

Ég skil ekki af hverju er allt í einu talað um Chaletwo í pokebolta, er hann ekki inni í hausnum á Mark?

Reply: Hann er á báðum stöðum. Líkamlega er hann í pokébolta sem er inni á tölvukerfinu, en hann er búinn að tengja sig hugrænt við Mark til að geta talað við hann. Þarna er talað um að Chaletwo hafi samþykkt að vera sendur út í líkamlegu formi, þ.e. pokéboltinn hans tekinn út af tölvukerfinu og hann síðan sendur út með venjulegum hætti.

[09/02/2011 10:59:24]

Everglider
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Reflecting, I said on the forums that I was like Lapras, but I think I'm more like Stantler at this point. I like her because she tries to keep things light, like me.

[06/04/2011 21:59:37]

TE
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

My point simply was, it is not impossible for Tyranitar to haunt the main characters again in the future. I guess I should have elaborated. I've been reading into too much symbolism lately.

What really made me think of Sneasel as Floatzel was the comment about how Sneasel seemed to have no concern for anything except power, as demonstrated when she regarded Letaligon leaving in an arguably close-minded way. Plus, Ninetales attacked her as well. Plus, Floatzel wanted to fight strong foes, implying that she is very combat-oriented.

[05/16/2011 02:57:40]

TE
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

The last sentence of this chapter seems to foreshadow that Letaligon would not be released, or at the very least, would come back at some point. And if she's coming back, then I would assume that Tyranitar would also make some sort of comeback.

I'm curious as to how you would specialize Sneasel's personality, because she seems very similar to Floatzel as of now.

And in general, this is really random, but I thought the name of the fic was "The Quest of Legends" until today.

Reply: It's rather strange jumping from "Letaligon seems to be having some second thoughts about leaving" to "Tyranitar, who was left behind out of necessity on an island they have no reason to visit again, will return." The fact the main characters are each losing a pseudo-legendary around the same point in the story is coincidental; I'm not here trying to make everything symmetric for Mark and May.

Sneasel and Floatzel are similarly enthusiastic about battling, and I imagine they're going to get along swimmingly, but Sneasel is a considerably more serious character. Floatzel enjoys fighting and growing stronger and is very much in this for the sheer crazy joy of it. Sneasel is just very focused and ambitious and takes the whole thing quite seriously. In this manner, actually, Sneasel is more like Letaligon than Floatzel; I kind of worried that as a "replacement" people would find her too similar. (But Letaligon is also a lot younger and more insecure, and her final objective was revenge on her father to be achieved through strength, whereas Sneasel cares about strength in itself.)

[05/08/2011 03:48:31]

Everglider225
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Now whenever I play my Platinum, I think of this! And sometimes I talk to my screen like a schizophrenic person…I brag about my team to my brother and I drive him crazy. He even threatened to take away my game guide and I almost threw a book at his head.

[04/20/2011 01:46:00]

Rotom4m
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

FINALLY!

[04/14/2011 13:41:13]

Everglider225
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Wow. That was really good.

[04/09/2011 18:22:34]

Everglider225
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Dude, I think all of the Pokemon have issues now except for Jolteon, and Stantler.

Reply: Sandslash doesn't have issues either. And Dragonite is also pretty issue-free, really. As are some of May's Pokémon. They're just not as prominent as the ones that do. :P

[04/09/2011 18:19:52]

Everglider225
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

How come this safari is in varied terrain and most game safaris are in marshes? This one seems more like pal park.

Reply: This is quite similar to the Johto Safari Zone in HG/SS, minus the freaky rearrange-the-zones thing. Only the D/P/Pt Safari Zone is specifically in a marsh to my knowledge.

[04/09/2011 18:17:43]

Kiri
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Errr…I'm not sure if I really got that…Wh doesn't Letaligon trust Sneasel? Snealsels in my Platinum game are constantly evading me :)

Reply: It's not that Letaligon doesn't trust Sneasel so much as that it upset her to be told she's not strong enough.

[04/09/2011 18:15:11]

puredragon222
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Do I see our little May getting a tad more sentimental and less battle-oriented by catching that Stantler, a *gasp* NORMAL POKEMON!!

Another thing that I noticed in this chapter: How does Mark hide Chaletwo? I mean, in this Safari you don't give in your Pokemon, but for example at the League he gave in his Pokemon for testing, and surely they have a detector to make sure ALL Pokemon have been given in. If this is indeed the case, surely it should have detected Chaletwo's Pokeball? Perhaps something you might consider addressing in the IALCOTN if there isn't an obvious reason I'm missing. :)

Reply: Chaletwo isn't technically in a ball, per se, except when Mark specifically takes him out of storage so that he can come out; usually he's just in the PC storage, but his anchor to Mark's brain lets him stick around speaking to them telepathically and all that. That said, of course, that just opens the question of why they aren't examining all the Pokémon in his box, discovering he has a bunch of legendaries and freaking out. I've been thinking there is some sort of a privacy clause so that any Pokémon you don't specifically enter in the League aren't examined, but unfortunately I wasn't thinking to have them made to pick which Pokémon were to be entered out of the PC when I wrote chapter 45, rather than just handing in their Pokéballs.

[04/03/2011 00:52:27]

Blahblahblah
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Okay, this really isn't on any chapter but the fic in general, how does evolving into Scizor make Scyther slower and unable to fly. Yes, it stands to reason that metal makes one heavier but it wouldn't make a Scizor that much heavier and the increased aerodynamics and larger wings offset this the only problem I find with Scizor morphology is the fact that they shouldn't be able to walk. Am I the only one has noticed how impossible those legs are? Curving downward like that? However the most disturbing fact is that Scizor lacks feet.

Reply: Scizor's base Speed is forty points lower than Scyther's, hence slower, and its Pokédex entries explicitly say that its wings are not used for flying, just regulating temperature. I didn't just make that up.

[04/02/2011 23:08:30]

Unknown
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Interesting chapter … May seems to be trying to prove something. A stantler and her .. yes, I was thinking "strange…" just like Mark.
I like how you put different personalities for the pokemon, it makes it a lot more interesting, and realistic as well - of course they won't all get along … and you make sure their peronalities will help drive the plot in that way you want, excellent!

Is there any way to put a small recap before the chapter though? Not reading for a while makes me forget some important plot elements.

Reply: She does seem to be trying to prove something, doesn't she? I think Alan may have got to her a bit.

This fic's plot is such a huge, convoluted pretzel that proper recaps might be kind of huge and overbearing to put before every chapter. It might be plausible to just write a special continuously updated general-purpose plot recap page to let people refresh their memories when necessary, though. I'll see what I can do about that.

[03/26/2011 22:20:42]

SilverLatios47
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

I have a feeling Sneasel and Floatzel would make very good friends….

[03/26/2011 14:32:40]

Oh-Paching
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Haha, I love Sneasel already here. She's just like, "If they didn't destroy the world before, why would they now?" Good for you.

[03/25/2011 11:44:24]

Freakyalex
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Did Mark just catch my favourite pokemon ever?

YES!

[03/23/2011 18:23:29]

Happy
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

Gosh I think I love Stantler already n__n She sounds so reasonable and… normal, it amuses me. I know that Sandslash and Jolteon are pretty much sane as well, but they tend to take a back seat, not to mention they don't happen to be present during this clash of ~personalities~. I'm hoping she gets more screentime.

[03/21/2011 01:10:16]

SilverNinetales
Story: The Quest for the Legends (ILCOE)
Chapter: Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari

I have read your entire fanfic, and let me just say, I love it. The concept of making Pokemon so much more realistic in this way is very captivating. You are a very good writer, and I hope that you keep on writing this story. ^-^

[03/20/2011 04:50:07]

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